In my success criteria I am going to
* use some long and some short sentences.
* use adjectives and adverbs.
* use juicy verbs to start a sentence.
* use a simile or a metaphor.
* keep to one main idea in each paragraph.
* edit for spelling and punctuation.
I found it hard to use a metaphor or a simile because I didn't understand what it meant.I found it easy to keep to one main idea in each paragraph.
" Whoo hoo! " I yelled as I rode on a roller coaster with my Dad. We were at a giant place in Palmerston North. It was amazing because there were heaps of bouncy castles and food to eat like candy floss ,candy, giant lollipops and heaps more.
After we drove to the playground and as I was about to touch the bark with my shoes. I hit the wood and fell down on the ground with a bleeding knee. So we had to sit down with a tissue over my knee and wait till it stopped bleeding. It was extremely painful so Dad and I went back at the motel.
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