We had a bit of chat then me and my sister said “ Mum and Dad can you come into the kitchen”. They quickly came and to their surprise there were no Easter eggs left. So I told them we hid them inside the house and you guys had to find them. I couldn’t even finish my sentence and they were already finding them.
After one hour of finding we counted the Easter eggs that my parents found. There were exactly thirty chocolate Easter eggs. While my parents were finding the eggs, me and my sister were watching Tv. We finally asked our parents if we were allowed one more. They said “ Don’t have one, have two”. We were so happy. Then we spent the whole day doing fun activities. The End
Hi Gurpuneet, what I cool twist to Easter, getting your parents to find all of the Easter eggs. I could see you were trying to use some descriptive language in your writing such as 'surprise', 'extremely excited' and 'quickly'. What were you learning in this writing task? Could you add some more powerful words to add even more detail to your story? Ka pai, Miss Hickling.
ReplyDeleteThanks Miss Hickling for commenting on my writing.
DeleteNext time when i will do another writing i will make sure i add some more powerful words and more detail.
Ma Te Wa
Gurpuneet